The Effects of Graduate From University
A lot of students study for go to university so they are enter YGS and LYS.Graduate from university was gained a lot of useful.The purpose of this essay is to discuss the three main effects of graduate from university which are find good job, win life experience and increase your culture.
The first effect of find good job.If you graduate from university,you will have got good job than graduate from high school.Because you know a lot of knowledge,job experience so bosses prefer to graduate from university.Also you have got good salary,well possibility in work.On the other hand your boss trust you for job.You can find quickly job.
The second effect of you win life experience.University life was won a lot of life experience.For example,you leave your family annd you meet different people.Youlearn only live.Also you learn cook meal,washing dishes and discover different place,people.People has got variety thought and you understood very difficult to they.
The third effect of increase your culture.You meet a lot of friends and your friend explain different knowledge,culture so your culture increase.For example your best friend from İstanbul sonyou learn İstanbul’s culture very well.On the other hand you go university trip,you see new place and come a lot of famous people from university and explain a lot of knowledge so increase your culture.
To sum upgraduate from univerdity,aseverythink that is new our lives,can be terrifying at first,but with a little bit of effort,it can become one of the greatest experiences of our lives.It is very important to enjoy our university studies because it will help us become independent and responsible people,only if we learn how to survive it.
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the first effect of graduating from university is finding a good job.
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the second effect of graduating from university is that you gain life experience.
learn living alone.
the third effect of being a university graduate is that you increase your cultural knowledge.
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your content in your body paragraphs is good, but you can enrich it with examples, statistics etc.
your conclusion paragraph is good, but maybe you can talk about culture too.
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