OBESITY
In the21th century many of people hhave obesity.Obesity is very important health problem in a person ‘s life which effect people’s lifestyle and personality.Moreover, people do not do anything although people believe that obesity is an important healht problem.There are several effects of obesity.
The first and most important effect is poor healht in a person’s life.Obesity cause lots of harmful and dangerous disasters, which are high blood pressure, hearth disease, diabets, and stress.According to doctors, people who are obese may be ill these diseaster easier than other people.So,obesity is very dangerous disaster.
The second effect is economic.People pay lots of money for obesity.The hospitals need more money, and overweight person pays a lot for special diets.For example, my uncle is a person who is overweight.He went to the private doctor three years ago.And he paid lots of money for special diet.So, the economic way of obesity may damage a family’s budget.
The third effect is difficulty in finding clothes.Because of this, a lot of people complain. Overweight people whodo not find clothes suffer from there are not many clothes.So,finding clothes is really diffucult problem for overweight people because companies produce small size clothes.
As a consequent, the effects of obesity are poor health,economics, and difficulty finding clothes.So, obesity is very dangerous and harmful problem for overweight people.
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